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Exo Saves The Day, Chapter 28

Post by gynoneko » Thu Feb 02, 2012 9:45 am

Alright, another installment is ready. Sorry these take so long to get out. Last month the holidays got in the way, ad this month (predictably) classes have taken over. I'm lucky to get this done at all during the quarter. I hope you enjoy this chapter, the next rest of them should be much more fun! :devil: Feedback please!

1) How did you like this chapter versus the last one? Which is your favorite in the whole story so far?
2) Are there too many details / not enough? Do they balance well?
3) Are there any questions you have about the story, characters, etc? (any at all, I might not answer if it involves the story, but it might clarify things I need to define more)
4) Out of the entire story, what is your favorite part so far? What is your least favorite part?
5) Is there any part of my writing that distracts you?
6) Who is your favorite character?


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Chapter 1. Chapter 2. Chapter 3. Chapter 4.
Chapter 5. Chapter 6. Chapter 7. Chapter 8.
Chapter 9. Chapter 10. Chapter 11. Chapter 12.
Chapter 13. Chapter 14. Chapter 15. Chapter 16.
Chapter 17. Chapter 18. Chapter 19. Chapter 20.
Chapter 21. Chapter 22. Chapter 23. Chapter 24.
Chapter 25. Chapter 26. Chapter 27.

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Exo Saves the Day
Chapter Twenty Eight: Mixed Signals
By Gynoneko


"What are you talking about? It's 4am!" Tom grumbled, wincing at the light from the hallway.

"It's Tera! I'm telling you she's alive" I repeated.

"I know. I know. She's gone, but we'll get her back" he said annoyed as he got out of his bed.

"No! I mean I can hear her... in my head." Tom looked at me like I was crazy. Thinking back, I would have done the same.

"Look, you're tired, you need some sleep. We can talk about this in the morning."

"I don't want to sleep! Tera is out there, and she needs me!"

Tom gave me a hard stare, and pushed me out of his room. By now I had waken the others, and Jen and Joan came out of their room to see what was going on.

"Go to bed Danny!" Tom ordered. I knew he was right, but I didn't want to listen. There was nothing I could do for Tera in the state I was in; I was too weak to even fight Tom back. "We'll discuss this in the morning. Good night!"

He slammed the door, and left me there alone in the hall. Joan came out instantly and put her hands on my shoulders.

"Come on Danny, let’s get you to bed. You need to sleep" she said. Her voice was calming and smooth, and I found myself being guided into my room.

Joan led me to the bed, and pulled off my coat, my Exo-suit, my shirt and pants, leaving me in my underwear and socks. I was too dazed and tired to do anything anymore. She pulled back the covers and gently guided me into my bed. I lay there staring at the ceiling as she tucked me in; her every movement graceful and delicate. I saw a lot of Tera in Joan; in her movements, her voice, even the way she glanced at me. Even though Tera was gone, I was glad Joan was still with me.

"Would you like me to stay the night with you?" Joan asked in a sweet and gentle voice. I was too tired and cranky to give her a proper response, so instead I turned away from her in my bed without saying a word. She understood that I wished to be alone. "Alright. I'll see you in the morning Danny. Goodnight... master."

As soon as I closed my eyes, I was off in a dreamless sleep. It wasn't one of those nights with tossing and turning, or even a pleasant night leaving you feeling energized. It was more like what I imagined Tera and her sisters did whenever they recharged. I get the sleep I needed, and nothing else. I no longer felt tired, but I didn't feel energized either. No wonder they liked to sleep as well as recharge. I had no idea what time it was when I woke up, except that I awoke to the sound of my door opening and closing quietly, and a beam of light from the hallway invading the dark before it went out again.

I opened my eyes and looked over at the door. Jen stood there, dressed in a black lacy cami with thin straps and all-too-short denim shorts. She stood there looked down at me with a sad look on her face. There was enough light now coming through the cracks around the door that I could see her as my eyes readjusted to the dark.

"What time is it?" I asked groggily.

"It's almost noon" she said, her voice gentle.

"What do you want?"

"I came here to apologize."

"For what?" I asked, turning my back toward her in my bed.

"For everything. For losing Tera. For..."

"You didn't do anything wrong. You have nothing to be sorry for."

"Than to cheer you up" she replied with a lighter mood.

"I don't need cheering. I need sleep. I need people to listen to me. I need Te-"

"I need you!" she interrupted. "... to uh... forgive me."

"I forgive you already" I said. I turned over to face her again, except this time she was standing right next to the bed. I sat up as she leaned toward me.

"Thank you. But I need more than that." She was giving me that look in her eye that she never gave me... it was the look that said she wanted me, and I was taken aback by it.

"Jen! What are you-" I tried to protest. She interrupted me though by kissing me hard and deep on the lips; her tongue clashing with mine. She wrapped her arms around me and pushed me back into the bed.

"I need you, Danny. I've wanted you to ask me out since we were kids! But you never made a move. Why do you think I wanted to hang out with you all the time? Just like last week... like every week?"

"But what about Jack?" I asked sitting up again.

"Fuck Jack! I want you, Danny!" She kissed me again. It felt good, it felt really good. She broke off the kiss as she playfully bit my lower lip, pulling back and letting it snap back into place. Slowly, she lowered the straps on her shoulders, and let her form-fitting top slide down, revealing her perky round tits. This was the first time I had ever seen her chest, and it was everything I always imagined it would be. She lifted the top up and over her head, arching her back and lifting her arms as she did. I instinctually reached out and cupped her breasts in my hands, and massaged them. She made playful noises as I caressed her.

"Jen..." I mumbled. My mind by now had turned off, and all I could think about was the half-naked girl standing before me. Scratch that- the fully-naked girl. As soon as her top was off, she unbuttoned her shorts, and with a see-saw motion in her hips, lowered her shorts and her panties bit-by-bit until she was completely naked. I took in the glorious sight, savoring every moment, enjoying every curve and subtle nuances of her body and her skin. She was completely shaved down there, which gave me a clear view of her most private parts. Before I could register everything that was happening, she crawled onto me, and lowered the sheet off me.

"Shh... no more words" she said, putting her finger to my lips. She kissed me softly again on the lips, and then the neck, followed by the chest. She kept going until she reached my growing member, and giggled as she pulled it out of my underwear. Pleasure rushed up and down my spine as she took it into her mouth, licking, sucking, and caressing me. I was about ready to explode when she stopped, and climbed up higher.

"Wait" I tried to protest, as thoughts of Tera came back to me. However, I lost my voice as she lowered herself, caressing me with her moist lower lips. She sighed quietly and breathed in heavily as she rubbed her sensitive areas against mine. Finally, Jen reached down and gently grasped my hard member, and aligned it to her soft folds. "What about Jack?" I asked again. Jen hesitated, and I could see her face calculating, thinking about what she was doing. Still, it didn't stop her. She lowered herself onto me, and completely engulfed me inside her.

She gasped and breathed loudly into my ear as she bounced up and down. She felt amazing, as good as Tera. Somehow, my thoughts of Tera were drowned out by the pleasure Jen was giving me. I stopped resisting her, and moved with her, increasing the action and the pleasure. We continued to make love with her on top, as we both reached our climax. She reached hers first, her face locked in a silent scream while her body convulsed. I lifted her up and put her on the bed on her back to finish up. It didn't take long for me to reach my limit, and I opted to pull out of her and release on her stomach. We lay there, breathing heavily as we basked in the afterglow. Except... it wasn't as sweet as it should have been. This was just sex, and nothing else. It felt good, it was full of passion, but there was no real love in it.

I got up and started getting dressed. Jen sat up on the bed, wiping herself off with my sheets as she eyed me with a dirty look.

"Is that it? Is that all I get?"

I looked back and her, and threw her clothes to her. "I'm still in love with Tera, Jen. I'm sorry."

"Look... She's just a robot! She can't love you like I can. She..." she fell silent as I glared at her. "I... I didn't mean that! I'm sorry!"

"You know she can!" I snapped. I continued to dress as she started to pull her shirt on. "Jennifer... I love you, but not in that way. You are my best friend. I would do almost anything for you... but you ask for too much."

"I- I don't want to be just friends" she said defensively.

"And I don't want to hurt you or my friends."

"I'm not going to give up on you! We can be something more..."

"Yeah? And what about you and Jack?" I said bitterly.

"J- Jack? He has nothing to do with th-"

"Bullshit!" I interrupted. "Why did you hesitate when I mentioned him? Why do you still get flustered when you hear his name?" She paused, contemplative, as I lectured her. I calmed my voice, and spoke to her as her friend. "Before you go off trying to arrange someone else's life, arrange yours. I mean that as your friend. I don't want to see you get hurt. What happened just now... shouldn't have happened. But... there it is. It will always be between us."

I had nothing else to say really. I was upset she seduced me, concerned she was messing up her chances with Jack, and also that she was going down a road she shouldn't. I was afraid she'd get in between me and Tera, but I knew that as long as Tera was alive, she'd never give me up either. Then again, I needed to save her, and time was of the essence. I wasted too much time already!

"I'll see you in the lounge" I said quietly as I opened the door to the room, leaving her still getting dressed behind me. I walked into the bright hallway and practically ran into Jack. He was heading out of the dorms when we almost ran into each other, and for a split second, I saw his eyes dart behind me. For an instance, a look of sadness and a hint of terror crept on his face. He had seen Jen getting dressed behind me. I didn't know what to say, or do, so I just looked away and left the dorms, leaving him behind looking between me and Jen.

Everyone else had already gathered in the kitchen area with the exception of Andrea. For the moment, Andrea was keeping guard over the Labs, where apparently Diane had been confined while they figured out what to do with her. Glancing in, I saw the dark-haired woman sitting on a workstation table with various tubes and cables attached to her torso and arms; after all, she was a cyborg. She stared off into space, her head hanging low, with a look of utter despair and depression, I was sure she'd kill herself if there was anything pointy nearby. She didn't move except to breathe, and I noticed her eyes were red and stained with tears. I thought I had it bad for Tera, but her husband had just been mutilated before her eyes. I couldn't even imagine how she must have felt.

I joined everyone else in the lounge, to discuss what to do next. The sleep did help me think clearer, although Jen's antics upset me already. I wasn't sure exactly how to say it to everyone, but last night I clearly picked up her signal, if only for a minute. I decided to start off with an apology,

"I'm sorry for everything that happened... for my behavior last night, and this morning, for how everything turned out, for everything." Before anyone else could say anything, I continued. "Last night, I picked up Tera's signal. It was faint, but it was definitely there. I don't know how close or far she is, but for some reason, I could pick it up last night."

"You could sense her? Wh- What do we do now?" Annie asked.

"I... have no idea" I said with brutal honesty. "I was hoping you guys would have some ideas."

"We could drive around town till you pick her up again" Joan suggested.

"That would take all day, and you still might not sense anything" Cynthia said. "This is a big city."

"Well we have to do something" I interjected.

We fell into silence as everyone sat around thinking of possible solutions. Jack came in, silent and contemplative. A few minutes later, Jen followed, keeping her head low, and decided to sit apart from everyone else.

"Where did you sense her?" Annie asked after a few minutes.

"It was in the clearing where we found you the other day in the woods" I clarified.

"On the rock in the clearing?" she asked.

"Yeah."

"What are we doing?" Jack asked.

"Danny says he sensed Tera last night in the woods" Joan answered, still deep in thought.

"Sensed? What is she talking about?" he asked me.

"It's the nano-bots in her system. Part of the binding we share is that I can sort of feel her nano-bots when she's close by."

"So they use some sort of wireless signal, right?" he asked to the room in general. Tom had a better chance of answering this than I did.

"Yeah, something like that" Tom said. He sounded a little unsure about himself, and I wondered how much he knew about the system of nano-bots he placed into Tera. They were vital to her systems, and while he might not have built the nano-bots himself, he should have working knowledge of how it works if not more. After all, these were the same nano-bots that did such unique things as the binding Tera and I shared. If he didn't make it, he had to have worked with the people who did.

"And?" Jack asked.

Tom sighed, and sat down next to Jack. "I didn't actually build the nano-bot system, but I'll tell you all I know. Some of the more technical things I'm a little hazy on..."

The two of them chatted for a short while. Jen was still silent and feeling down, and I knew what I said was harsh, but I hated to see her so upset. I decided to have a private talk with her.

"How're you doing?" I asked her.

She looked up at nodded. "I'll live" she said.

"I'm sorry I upset you. I didn't mean-"

"Don't" she interrupted.

"Huh?

"Don't do that. Don't tell me you are all sorry and want to be friends and all that bull."

"Well... What am I supposed to say? I'm glad I hurt you?" I said sarcastically.

"No..." she sighed. "I just... have a lot to think about right now. I'm the one who should be sorry. Sorry I came onto you like that."

"It's alright. If you need me for anything, let me know."

"Right now... I need to think. And to make it up to you, I'll do my best to find Tera. God... I hope she'll forgive me."

"Tera? I'm sure she will."

"Danny" Tom called out. He signaled for me to come closer.

I excused myself from Jen, who continued to sulk, although the loom from her corner was lifted somewhat. Jack and Tom took my by the shoulder and guided me toward Andrea, who continued to stand vigilant over the labs.

"We'll need access to lab 1 please, Andrea" Tom said looking up at the towering gynoid. She stepped aside and allowed us access to the rooms behind.

"What exactly is going on?" I asked. They hadn't told me anything yet when they started guiding me toward the labs.

"We need a blood sample" Jack said as he pushed me into the lab with a sadistic look in his eye.

"WHAT!?" Jack knew about my fear of needles, and with him and Tom blocking the exit, there wasn't anything I could do.

"It's for the nano-bots" Tom said.

"It's for Tera" Jack added. "It's the only way we'll be able to find her."

I knew he was right, but that didn't help me get over the fear of poking me with a needle. I had no choice, but I still struggled to get toward the exit.

"Relax Danny-boy, this will hurt you more than it will hurt me" Jack said. I didn't appreciate his joke. "Besides, you owe me one."

Tom and Jack guided me toward the bench, and sat me down on it. Jack and Tom whispered something I didn't quite hear, and Jack walked away leaving Tom to hold me down. I continued to struggle against him. I knew I needed to do this... I knew something like this would have to happen when they started talking about nano-bots, but I still didn't want to do it. And even if I had to, I wanted it to be under my terms.

"Calm down Danny! We won't hurt you" Tom said calmly, or as calmly as a man holding down his friend could be.

"Poking me with needles isn't going to hurt?!" I hissed. "At least give me some air!" I growled, hoping he'd let go so I could stand up and back away.

"Not until you calm down!" he retorted. I was glad I hadn't raised my voice yet, because I noticed Diane sitting in the opposite lab through the window. I'm sure I must have looked like a spectacle. "Please Danny! I want to see my daughter again, and I'm sure you want to see her just as much as I do. Please Danny. It's for Tera..."

I looked at his calm deep eyes, and started to calm down myself. He was right. If I got myself under control, at least I didn't have to embarrass myself in front of others, and it probably wouldn't be as bad as I was making it out to be. I hated needles, but I took a deep breath and closed my eyes until I calmed down.

"Sorry" I said. I relaxed, and he backed away, giving me some air. Jack returned with a needle in his hand. I closed my eyes and braced myself. Tom and Jack took care of business, swabbing my arm, and preparing the needle. The needle stung like a bitch, and they took a good-sized sample before they finally pulled it out. I exhaled, as they finished up, wiping my arm and putting a bandage on it.

"Does that make us even?" I asked.

"This? Not even close" he said with a twisted grin. "I'll let you know when you've paid off your debt." I got a sick feeling in my stomach. He knew what I did, and even though I didn't start it, I did continue it. I felt horrible for what I did, and feared what he had planned for me to balance the scales.

Jack and Tom took the blood sample to the other side of the lab, leaving me alone, while they hovered over the small vial that fit snugly in the needle and collected the blood. They were probably going to try to pinpoint the signal the nano-bots were receiving, something I was glad I couldn't help them with. Instead, however, i looked at the hunched form of Diane in the adjacent room. I got up off the table, and entered the room.

Diane didn't even look up at me as I approached her. She sat there silently, in deep contemplation. She no longer wore the same clothes from the previous night. Instead, she had on a white bath robe, covering her up surprisingly well.

"What do you want?" she finally asked in a low and quiet tone.

"How are you feeling?"

"How do you think I'm feeling?! My life is as good as over. I've been betrayed, my body is broken, my husband is..." her voice broke up, but she cleared her throat and continued through the pain. "...dead. I have nothing!"

"You're alive at least. That's something" I replied, sitting down near her.

"Life is overrated" she spat. "Why didn't you just leave me there?"

"I don't have the right to decide who lives and who dies. I just did what I thought was right."

"I don't want to live! Look at me! I can't even move. I'm attached to this machine just so I can cling to this shithole you call life."

I took a closer look at her. Discretely running under her robes was a series of tubes and wires attached to a nearby computer terminal. The screen readout told me that it was providing her with full life-support. Her entire body, as far as I could tell, was artificial. She needed the artificial life support of her cybernetic body to keep what little of her biological self she had left alive. Mostly, she was a brain in a jar, all be it a fancy sexy jar. As I looked deeper at the screen, I could see it wasn't just her brain, but also her spine, parts of her torso, and other various organs were still organic. Nonetheless, she was paralyzed without her cybernetic body, and as it was, she was a vegetable. Her systems were in repair mode, and mobility was shut down for her own safety.

"You're a full body cyborg?" I said under my breath in amazement.

"And what of it?" she hissed. "Lots of people are restricted to prosthetics, why should I be treated any different from them?"

"I'm sorry. I didn't mean to..." I said apologetically.

"No. I'm... Look, I was in an accident a long time ago. I've put it behind me. My husband... Bob was my reason to hang on. Now what do I do? I have no family, no children, no job. I have nowhere to go..."

"You can stay with us until you figure it out" I told her. She sat silently thinking about my offer.

"It's not like I can move right now..."

"We'll get you fixed up, and then what you do next is your choice."

She looked down, with what little movement she had before nodding her head. I stood up and held her shoulder lightly for a moment before turning around to leave. As I turned around and walked back toward the other lab, Diane called out behind me.

"I'm sorry... for pulling my gun on you at that ice cream parlor."

"It's alright. Joan said you were always nice to her. I'll take her word, and give you the benefit of the doubt." I realized just then how similar to Tom and Cynthia he and her husband must have been. Diane was devoted to her husband, and worked with robots every day, although in a very different way. Due to Diane's condition, she was unable to have children, and I clearly remembered Tom and Cynthia once told me they couldn't have children either. I never asked why. Of course, these two couples took very different paths, and one of them ended up torn apart. I felt bad for her, but I didn't know if there was anything more I an do than offer her a place to stay until she could get back on her feet.

I walked through the door into the other lab, leaving Diane to her thoughts. Jack and Tom were just getting finished with their analysis, and Jack, being the hacker he is, started to rig up a device of some sort.

"Thanks again for your help" Tom said as he patted me on the shoulder. "We've isolated the signal, and Jack's working on something now."

"Something that does what?" I asked.

"It makes chips" Jack said sarcastically. "Blimey Danny-boy, use your noggin. It finds the signal, and pinpoints the origin. It's a compass to Tera" he clarified.

I took a closer look at what he was working on. It looked like he was attaching a clear box with metal plates and thin tubes filled with blood to his laptop. He started working on some sort of program to process the data.

Jack was finished doing whatever it was he was working on in a few minutes. He took a step aside, and showed me his program. He showed me the gist of it. It was easy enough to follow. Essentially, it would sample the signal it was receiving as we moved around the city, and would start to pinpoint where the signal was most likely coming from. I didn't like the idea of taking hours to go searching blindly through the streets, but what other choice did I have?

We left the lab to join the others again in the main area. I was anxious to get going and tried to get together what I could in a hurry to keep get on the move. I hadn't had any communication from Tera's nano-bots since late night, and I was concerned I wouldn't pick anything up again. Joan was equally concerned, and was preparing for a rescue herself, gearing up and getting prepared. Annie was also anxious, and nervous. She seemed uneasy, more so than usual, but I wasn't sure why.

"You alright?" I asked.

"Yeah... Just thinking about last night. I know I didn't do much, but I keep thinking about that guy I killed. I mean, I shot him. I killed him, on my own."

"It's not your fault. You saved my life and Joan's" I told her while I packed a bag with food. "We owe you. Besides, I thought you told me this wasn't the first time you..."

"It isn't, but for some reason, it feels different this time. I regret every time I've taken a life when Liberati controlled me, but this was something I did on my own. Even with a new master, I still can't break away from the role of a death dealer."

"You only did it when our lives were in danger. Don't be so hard on yourself. I'm here today thanks to you."

"But I couldn't save Tera..." Those words hurt. I froze in place when she said her name, and I knew she was really beating herself up more than I realized. I continued to pack in silence.

"There's too many of us to fit in one car" Cynthia said. "You'll need speed to find her, but 2 cars will only slow you down."

"Besides" Tom added, "with that cyborg woman here, someone will need to watch after her during all this."

"Why can't Andrea?" Jen asked.

"Andrea is not a medical android. She can't help her if something happens. All she can do is defend or attack. Without a person around, she could die if there was a power failure."

"We'll stay here" Cynthia said, standing next to Tom. "As much as I want to save Tera, we aren't really going to be much help. Take Joan and Annie with you" she said.

"Me too!" Jen announced. She stood up and grabbed a gun from Annie's bag, and stood near me.

"Guess that leaves me out" Jack said. Sure we could fit 5 in the smaller car, or more in the SUV, but I figured he wanted to distance himself from me and Jen right now. "I showed you the program; you should be fine without me. I'll monitor your progress from here." He handed me his laptop but his grip on it was tight. "Don't put a scratch on my Sonya" he said before letting go.

"Sonya?" I mouthed to myself. I looked down at the laptop and the logo for 'SONY' was clearly visible across the top. He had stuck on a sticker of an 'A' in a different font at the end of it. Classic.

"And Danny..." Jack called out as I turned to pack the laptop.

"Yeah?"

Jack looked between me and Jen, and something in his eyes told me he was worried about her. "Never mind."

"If you need us, give us a call. We'll be right there" Tom said.

It didn't take long before the 4 of us piled into the small silver car equipped with weapons, first aid, tool kits, and even food. We had quickly prepared ourselves with food, water, weapons, a first aid kit, a tool kit, and anything else we figured we'd need. We were probably going to be searching all day, if not longer, some didn't bother to wear my Exo suit just yet, but I was glad to find Joan had taken the liberty of charging it up for me the previous night. I was anxious to get moving, as was Joan, who took the helm, and drove the smaller silver car. Annie and Jen got in the back, and I took shotgun.

I watched as we drove away from the building, Tom and Cynthia standing outside watching back. I hoped the next time I saw them there would be a happy reunion. I for one was getting tired of all the running and fighting, but soon it would all be over.

Joan drove for 5 or so minutes down the street heading toward the main roads, hoping we'd get a signal. I popped open the laptop, and started monitoring the program. It was laid out simply enough. A preloaded map of the city would show where we were, and large red areas showed where we hadn't explored. As we drove, the red areas around us changed to gray, to indicate there was no signal there, and strangely enough, it spread out to cover a good sized area with very little movement.

"How's your arm?" I asked Joan, glancing over at her metallic limb. It was covered in numerous small cuts, but they weren't deep.

"I'll be alright" she said. "It hurt like a bitch last night, but dad took a look at it and I feel much better now. I... I'm sorry I worried you. She took me by surprise. I just didn't expect it."

Suddenly I felt the small voice in the back of my head speak up. I could sense Tera's nano-bots sending out a signal again. I quickly looked down at the screen in my lap, and watched, and waited. It didn't pick up the signal as well as I did, but after a few seconds, it started to confirm what I had felt. Was Tera really that close? Parts of the map now turned blue to show that a signal was received. The data in the back of my mind called out for help as it had done the night before. "Help. I'm here. I'm alive." That seemed to be all it said, as though she were caught in a loop or something.

"What is it?" Joan asked glancing over at me.

"It's Tera! I can sense her. But it's faint... weak. Keep going."

We continued forward, and the signal started to get stronger slowly as we went. It took several miles before the computer suggested we turn left. Joan did as it instructed, and the signal remained steady for several more minutes. With a few more turns, some trial and error, and Jack's program to guide us, we found ourselves heading out of town. It took half an hour, and we were already getting close to her.

"Help. I'm here. I'm alive" the data repeated endlessly in my head. I tried to send a response but only got some kind of error. It wasn't easy to send a response; I had to concentrate on using the right part of my brain to do it. In fact, it almost felt like I was typing with phantom limbs in order to send anything. I tried this again, to make sure I didn't screw it up, but the same error message occurred. The signal was strong, and it felt almost as if she was yelling.

Within a few more minutes, a green blob appeared on the screen. I was expecting a green dot, because that was supposed to indicate the origin of the signal. Maybe her message was somehow being strengthened or something. That would explain why I could sense her so far away, while normally a city block would be too far. Without that enhanced signal, what should have been a day or two journey turned into a trip that lasted less than an hour, so I wasn't complaining. Joan turned up a long dirt driveway going up a hill on the outskirts of town. The sign at the base of the hill was rusted away, and the laptop had no information on the location. We came to a stop when we came to a metal rusted gate preventing the car from going any farther. The green blob was just on the other side of the trees, beyond the gate, at the top of the hill.

"Looks like we are going to have to walk from here" Joan said. I was out of the car before she had even finished her sentence. I grabbed a rifle and my suit from the trunk of the car, and got ready. Tera was in there somewhere, and we were going to get her out!


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Re: NEW! Exo Saves The Day, Chapter 28

Post by TW » Thu Feb 02, 2012 5:09 pm

Somebody call Admiral Ackbar...

..cuz its a trap!

Or that's what my gut tells me, anyway. Feel free to prove me wrong :D

Great job on the chapter, man. Its good to finally see that sexual tension "released" between Jen.and Danny. TBH I thought he was just going to be having a wet dream or something, but I like to see you moving things forward in that arena. One other thing, and this is a point that I believe I've mentioned before, is how attached I feel I'm getting to your characters. I actually feel worried for Tera in a way that I don't see often outside of suspensful movies. Maybe its the fact that this story has been running for so long, but I feel truly attached to her in a way not common for most characters. You've done a great job of setting her up to be a very sweet, innocent, and endearing character. You don't want anything bad to happen to her, but you can't shake the feeling that it will...

Anyway, enough of my ramblings! Excellent job, and I cant wait for more!

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Re: NEW! Exo Saves The Day, Chapter 28

Post by gynoneko » Thu Feb 02, 2012 9:07 pm

Heh heh... caught me! :P

But even if you figured that out, the best is yet to come! Just wait till you see what happens in the next chapter.
I suspect that there will be about 5 more chapters... maybe 6, but we'll just have to see how it turns out. Glad you are liking the characters so far! I've been planning for some of these events for a long time so it is good to finally see them come to fruition. In the next chapter, there will be losses and an unexpected twist!
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Re: NEW! Exo Saves The Day, Chapter 28

Post by TW » Thu Feb 02, 2012 10:19 pm

Haha sorry if I blew up that twist, but it WAS kind of telegraphed, right?

Obviously I can't wait for more, even if I know there's a phyrric victory to come at the end. Even if you haven't had the response you were looking for, you've shown me that long form fiction can still work on this board. I know we've had a few in recent memory, Modifying the Contract and Cy-Gen: Family Matters being two examples, but the fact that you have really seemed to have taken to it to the point where you have multiple stories within the same universe planned is truly inspiring. You've done a great job weaving this tale together, Gyno, and I hope to see much more even after these next five or six chapters. Something tells me we'll be met with more questions than answers by the time the end comes...

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Re: NEW! Exo Saves The Day, Chapter 28

Post by liliwinnt6 » Thu Feb 02, 2012 11:18 pm

I'm not so pleased that what Jen did, but the stories need things happen to make themselves stories.
By the way, at the begining, "too dazed and tried to do anything", I think this " tried" could be "tired".
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Re: NEW! Exo Saves The Day, Chapter 28

Post by gynoneko » Fri Feb 03, 2012 8:36 pm

Thanks for that. I fixed the word. What can I say, it was a real word, so spell-check never picked it up :P.

Also, I know you might not like what she did, but this was something I planned to have her do a long time ago. She is not the innocent sweet girl. Originally this was going to happen back when they first met Joan, but I figured I wanted to develop her relationship with Jack more first before I start to mess with it. Jen is a complex character, and I wanted to keep her faults and imperfections.

As for questions and answers... there will be many questions raised, and many answers given, but not all will be revealed in this story. I will try, however, not to leave you with too many lingering questions, but just enough to make you want to come back for a second book ;) If there are any that I missed by accident, let me know when the time comes and I will try my best to answer them and fix the story.

BTW, the next chapter (miraculously) is ready. Look forward to it!
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Re: NEW! Exo Saves The Day, Chapter 28

Post by liliwinnt6 » Sat Feb 04, 2012 12:15 am

Then, be sure everything is revealed at the end!
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