"Enemy Of My Enemy?" Posted at The Wiki

Keizo · Post by **Keizo** » Sun Mar 07, 2010 3:22 pm

In response to a request by Section_Eight, I am posting an old story that I wrote at the wiki. Some of you may have already noticed that Part 1 has been posted for the past week. I have been reformatting it from an old file so that it can be posted online. I've also tried to clarify things so the story can flow a bit better. Part 2 should be up soon.

A special thanks to Robotman for his help in getting this posted and to those who remembered this story. Thanks

The story can be found here:
http://www.fembotwiki.com/index.php?title=Stories/Keizo

Enjoy!

barakuda · Post by **barakuda** » Sun Mar 07, 2010 11:03 pm

Hey I remember it . it was a great story. Very epic

Barakuda

Section_Eight · Post by **Section_Eight** » Mon Mar 08, 2010 10:53 pm

Wheeeeeeeeee!

MannequinMachinist · Post by **MannequinMachinist** » Wed Mar 10, 2010 10:57 am

This story's great. I've only read over the first part, but it's believably dystopian, claustrophobic, but most of all I love how concisely phrased it is, particularly in the early action sequence at the subway station.

While simple in structure compared to other stories, which typically employ extended descriptions of the environment to convey the dystopian theme, it instead focuses on the thoughts of a single character, interspersed with light causal observation made by that character.

It really captures the rushed, haphazard, practical style of thinking a person in such an environment would rely on in order to survive.

Conversely, I also appreciated the detailed retrospective prelude as well. It reeks of effort that is of a higher tier compared to similar companion passages to fembot/dystopia themed writings on the wiki that I've read, and Portia is complex, logical and believably self aware given the setting.

Great job!

Keizo · Post by **Keizo** » Thu Mar 11, 2010 5:00 am

Thank you all for the positive feedback! It's makes me glad that I was able to dig it up, clean it up, and put it back out there

I got your message about the picture, Barakuda, and it just happened to fit and makes a great visual, eh?

MannequinMachinist, I really appreciate your commentary and really hope that you enjoy Part 2 as well. Thanks for reading!

Brytestar · Post by **Brytestar** » Thu Mar 11, 2010 8:26 pm

Now we need some pictures.

barakuda · Post by **barakuda** » Fri Mar 12, 2010 12:08 am

Your very Welcome Keizo. Makes a very good visual.

Robot Devil · Post by **Robot Devil** » Fri Aug 06, 2010 6:38 pm

Wow! I finally finished reading the whole thing. Just WOW!

Keizo · Post by **Keizo** » Sun Feb 06, 2011 10:19 pm

Cool! I didn't know I had gotten some more feedback

Thanks!

So I was chatting with Robotman and the last part to this story which I had never finished writing came up. I'm really flattered that he remembered it! He asked if it could be posted at the wiki and I was hesitant at first since I had never gotten around to completing it.

I had actually completed three more chapters before circumstance kicked my butt as I was without a permanent home at the time (among other things). I decided to only post the first chapter because it can stand alone and the new characters and storyline had not been introduced yet.

It takes place 25 years after the first two parts. This is much more of a psychological than sexual story, so I'm just giving a heads-up to those who are interested. Thanks again for all the great feedback! I hope you enjoy this "lost chapter" as well. It can be found here:
http://www.fembotwiki.com/index.php?tit ... y%3F_Pt._3

"Enemy Of My Enemy?" Posted at The Wiki

"Enemy Of My Enemy?" Posted at The Wiki

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Your Very Welcome