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Re: Feedback and You!

Post by Esleeper » Wed May 04, 2016 10:50 pm

Murotsu wrote:My background is all technical and engineering. Creative writing is something I've only picked up in the last few years, mostly to keep from... Well, it's kept me here.

Anyway, at first I did lots of detail and narrative too. It took having it pointed out to me by pros how to fix that. Now I revel in eliminating stuff I included at first. I seek the most streamlined version of the scene I can create. I think carefully about each scene and what my senses (or those of the characters... my non-human characters get ones humans don't have) would be experiencing if I were there. Sights, smells, sounds. The feel of a surface.
Put yourself in your character's place. Try to think "if I were my character, what would I be experiencing in this scene?"

Also, try to storyboard some. Who is your main character? Focus on them. All the other characters are secondary. You can have more than one but remember who is important. If your story is about Thesis then focus on her. If Chares is important don't leave him out. Make sure the scenes revolve around the important characters.
I try. Complicating matters is that the community I write for most of my work (including what I posted) is rather big on worldbuilding, sometimes to the point of losing track of the story itself. I try to keep the habit under control, but ultimately it just doesn't feel right to me if I skimp on too much detail. Just a personality or cultural quirk on my end I guess, but I'll keep it in mind.

One last thing. Did the smut part of it seem alright to you? Even with several stories under my belt. I always get hung up worrying that I'm not doing it right.

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Re: Feedback and You!

Post by Murotsu » Wed May 04, 2016 11:25 pm

I do more sci-fi than anything else as far as writing goes. Even when you world build, and believe me I have made some incredibly detailed ones... including one I'm planning a story for here because he race fits the genre (imagine organic robots derived from humans... no artificial machine added...), I end up throwing away most of the detail as it isn't relevant to the story. You only need the bits that the characters actually interact with.
Think of it this way: How much of the world do you actually experience on a daily basis? Sure, there's lots of other stuff going on but what's relevant to you is the part you are actually involved with.

As for the smut / porn part, that's something best answered by someone else. I tend to go light on it because the way I see it including graphic sex scenes for the sake of including them holds next to zero interest to me. If it isn't part of the story, doesn't fit the narrative, then there's no point to it unless that's what your personal... whatever... wants. I want to be able to immerse myself in the story, become part of it.

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Re: Feedback and You!

Post by Robo-Admirer » Mon Sep 16, 2019 5:20 pm

Who would be up for giving me constructive criticism for my stories? I'd like your honest opinion and if it's negative, i want to hear it in full. Be brutally honest and don't hold back. I want to improve my writing capabilities, and i need people who won't be afraid to hit me where it hurts.

If anyone's up for this, please private message me!

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Re: Feedback and You!

Post by DollSpace » Thu Sep 26, 2019 10:20 pm

Robo-Admirer wrote: Mon Sep 16, 2019 5:20 pm Who would be up for giving me constructive criticism for my stories? I'd like your honest opinion and if it's negative, i want to hear it in full. Be brutally honest and don't hold back. I want to improve my writing capabilities, and i need people who won't be afraid to hit me where it hurts.

If anyone's up for this, please private message me!
I’ll give it a read and see if I can generate some constructive criticism and feedback for you. Send me DM with stories or links and I’ll read ‘em.

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