Trendsetting (Comic) Part 3

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Trendsetting (Comic) Part 3

Post by The Liar » Tue Nov 17, 2020 10:43 am

Not sure if I should do an epilogue, or just leave it a this.

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Re: Trendsetting (Comic) Part 3

Post by The Liar » Sun Nov 22, 2020 9:12 am

Fishing for some feedback here, I was a little on the mentally and emotionally exhausted side when doing this installment; so I'd like to ask if I managed to convey things in a manner so that it all made sense in the end?
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Re: Trendsetting (Comic) Part 3

Post by dingdongdug » Sun Nov 22, 2020 2:39 pm

Hi , Of course yes but since some time , feedback became very uncommon on fembot central and sometime it's demotivating
But , your works are very nice and please don't give up

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Re: Trendsetting (Comic) Part 3

Post by Extyr » Sun Nov 22, 2020 4:11 pm

I like how there was some foreshadowing with the class 5 bodies being made illegal. All in all, I liked the story. I think you're one of the best writers here to describe the mentality of a subservient robot. You obviously put a lot of thoughts into that.

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Re: Trendsetting (Comic) Part 3

Post by Karel » Wed Nov 25, 2020 8:59 pm

Liar, I'm ordinarily not a devotee of these 3D comics, and am almost always averse to explicit pornography, but I have to say that I quite enjoyed this one.

I'll admit that the enjoyment is greatly enhanced if I assume the panel shown in your post above is the concluding panel of the entire strip, and that I would find even greater enjoyment from a continuation of the series, provided the man in the story selects "Yes".

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Re: Trendsetting (Comic) Part 3

Post by MalcfunctionCrazyfor » Thu Nov 26, 2020 7:35 am

I loved this story for the most part.
The initial parts in how you described the investigation from a robot's point of view was really amazing and had me going.

As for the closure, it does convey the message fairly clearly, and the plot twist is easy to follow, so to speak.

My only criticism would be that it ended a bit.... abruptly? I think that's the right word. They had the realization, and the information they needed but all of a sudden it just... stops. "Here, do with us whatever you wish - The end".

That's about it. Other than that, everything else was really entertaining.

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